Sonntag, 4. Oktober 2009
Opinion essay "my ideal family"
Everybody has his/her own image what a family is, what’s the meaning of the family for his/her, but is there really a definitely answer for those questions?
My following setting to this question is a “traditional” Family.
But what is a traditional family for me and why is it better than others family types?
In the following essay I’ll try to delineate why my ideal family is better for me and the society than others family types.
A family signifies, to love each other, to be together with each other, to understand each other, carry compassion for each other and help them mutually.
In my opinion a real family is when you are together with your mother and father, if you have a mother provides for her children and the housekeeping and if you have a father provides for the whole family.
I personally find that a family isn’t a real family without your mother as the case may be your father. The main reason for me is because I have been also educated in a traditional family. I have learnt it thus and I could not fancy it differently. Family is then a real family when both parents are there for you and provide for you. I am certainly that I’ll educate my children just as my parents. But for me it isn’t basically if they are your real family or if you are adopted. Be a mother doesn’t signified just to bring a child on the world, to assort educate a child with dear.
In this paragraph I want to argue the relationships between the family members. In my opinion a real relationship between the family members is when you can tell your mum or your dad your secrets, when you can discuss about your problems and finally find a concertedly solution. In other words, when you can talk with your parents like with your best friends. But furthermore I think there should be rules and some constrains in the family.
Sometimes there can be exceptions. For example, you can have a mother which concerns for you, worries for you, does everything for you, and a father who is for example an alcoholic and hasn't any contribution for your education. In general it’s very important to think about the other family members. You shouldn’t think and live just for you when you want to live in peace and want to be happy together.
At last I try to answer the question “Which is the ideal family for the society?” I think there isn’t a real answer for this question because for example you can be really happy in your family but by the time you can get problems in your family. I cannot say my ideal family is better for the society than others because there can be a traditional family which isn’t happy and a single-parent family which is happy together. When you see a “happy” family then it doesn’t mean that they are really happy, you can’t know how they are in the reality. In short everyone has another meaning, another idea of the family which is ideal for the society. You cannot say „this is the ideal family for the society" Everybody has another setting. Some are very contently with his lives and his family, however nevertheless some are discontented and want to live rather in another family.
In conclusion I think everybody has an ideal family for himself. In my opinion there aren’t any answers for those questions because everybody has another setting for the ideal family.
But what I would like to say is, for me mine family is the ideal family. And I think and hope that everybody thinks so or can think like me.
You have always to accept what the others think or what they fancy. In the world the respect to each other may not be absent.
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exp/str: "Everybody has his/her own image what a family is, what’s the meaning of the family for his/her, but is there really a definitely answer for those questions?" --> Every has his own idea of what a family should be like and of a family's faunction and so there's no definite answer to this.
exp, sp: "My following setting to this question is a “traditional” Family."
g: ... than other family types
exp: "A family signifies, to love each other" --> A family's purpose is to ... to be compassionate (to show sympathy for each other) and support each other ...
exp/str: "In my opinion a real family is when you are together with your mother and father, if you have a mother provides for her children and the housekeeping and if you have a father provides for the whole family." (Here the sentence is totally incorrect. / C?
exp/str: "I personally find that a family isn’t a real family without your mother as the case may be your father." -> the sentence is totally incorrect / C??
exp / str: "The main reason for me is because I have been also educated in a traditional family." --> badly expressed idea, educate <--> to bring up
exp: "I could not fancy it differently" --> ???
exp / str: "Family is then a real family " --> A family is only a real family when ...
exp: "I am certainly that I’ll educate my children just as my parents." --> C?? --> I'm quite certain that ...
exp: "But for me it isn’t basically if they are your real family or if you are adopted." --> C?? basic <--> essential (or: it doesn't make a difference whether ...)/ if you're brought up in your real family or in an adoptive one
exp: "Be a mother doesn’t signified just to bring a child on the world, to assort educate a child with dear." --> ????
[The structure of this paragraph is wrong and you write fairly incoherent sentences. Most of what you say is more or less incomprehensible because of mistakes.]
exp: "In this paragraph I want to argue the relationships between the family members." --> ??
str: to discuss one's problems with someone
exp /g: "and finally find a concertedly solution" - ???
Don't use "but" and "furthermore" together.
sp / exp: constraints - What do you mean with this word?
g: a mother who
exp: "which concerns for you" --> ???
exp: "hasn't any contribution for your education" ???
g: think and live for yourself
(= be selfish)
[Again there's no real paragraph structure here and the way you present your arguments is very weak.]
exp: "I think there isn’t a real answer " --> a definite answer
exp: "but by the time you can get problems in your family" ???
exp: meaning <--> opinion <--> idea
exp: "Everybody has another setting. " ????
exp: "In general it’s very important to think about the other family members. You shouldn’t think and live just for you when you want to live in peace and want to be happy together." ---> many mistake here, difficult to understand
[Like before: a very weak paragraph!]
exp: "because everybody has another setting for the ideal family" --> ??
g: "mine family" -> my family
wo: you always have to accept
exp: "You have always to accept what the others think or what they fancy." ???
exp: "In the world the respect to each other may not be absent." ??
This is not a correct opinion essay. You first present your opinion and then you try to convince the reader that you're right. You don't do this.
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